Committing to co-create a Creative Crescendo course for US-Africa Institute, I never thought that series of pre-dawn Zooms with Ethiopian students would lead to an assignment for The Writing Coach. But it did.

Here is a sample of my work with a high school senior in Bahir Dar, Ethiopia, who eventually gained admission to the University of Pennsylvania, using a different essay. Click on the image below to open a file that shows edits and comments in detail, and then contact The Writing Coach to learn how I help students write and edit excellent college essays.

Round 1 Edits and Comments